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My Hope by ~Black-of-light:iconBlack-of-light:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Fixed


I held her in shade
Of a beautiful tree.
She laid in my arms,
Just her and me...

We laid in a field,
were rocks grow from the dirt.
It's a place for my love.
Not a cage for our hurt.

The flowers were gorgeous
All placed in their rows.
Who are they for?
Only god knows...

With her head in my lap
I played with her hair.
fore it was ok...
I knew she wouldn't care.

As the clouds grew dark
I Started to speak.
I told her i loved her,
And laid a kiss on her cheek.

As tears cut my eyes,
I rose slowly to stand.
I picked up the shovel.
And let go of her hand.

As I read her grave,
I dropped to a knee,
For my Isabella Hope,
1941 to 1963...



NOTE: Isabella Hope is a fictional character...the only person i have left....
©2005-2009 ~Black-of-light
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Author's Comments

ok, this poem may sound differant than what i usually write. just play along.

In this poem it's important you pay attention to details. and when you're done reading, go back through and look for the clues.

Comments please!!!

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~ImWorseAtWhatIDoBest May 24, 2005, 2:31:47 PM
edgar allan poe spelled girls names with some of his poems, i thought thats what you were getting at. this is really good though. and it is sort of different from the other stuff you write. but sometimes change is good

--
Everything has beauty, but not everyone sees it.
:iconblack-of-light:
~Black-of-light May 24, 2005, 2:34:56 PM
thanks, i was trying to get a suprise ending. i hinted a little too much to it though :D , it made my friend cry, i thought that was wicked kewl, it was so awesome to see her tears. i dont mean like laughing, but watching and seeing my work touch someone in that way.

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When I heard these words,
it brought me to shame,
"cant stop the bleeding,
I cant stop the pain"....

Take a look at my gallery!!
most of its Dark, but hey i like it
[link]
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~ProblemChild87 May 24, 2005, 2:39:01 PM
wow.....this is very deep...very deep....it left an impact....i give it a 10 out of 10

--
GI Joe
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Knowing is half the battle.....and the other half is violence.
:iconblack-of-light:
~Black-of-light May 24, 2005, 2:40:25 PM
:blushes:, thank you so much, your comments make me so happy:glomp:

--
When I heard these words,
it brought me to shame,
"cant stop the bleeding,
I cant stop the pain"....

Take a look at my gallery!!
most of its Dark, but hey i like it
[link]
:iconproblemchild87:
~ProblemChild87 May 24, 2005, 2:42:40 PM
well im glad, young poet...you deserve to be happy, as much as anyone else....i have high respect for you.

--
GI Joe
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Knowing is half the battle.....and the other half is violence.
:iconimworseatwhatidobest:
~ImWorseAtWhatIDoBest May 24, 2005, 2:50:30 PM
yeah, its always cool to see that your writing can bring out something in someone

--
Everything has beauty, but not everyone sees it.
:iconsilverlion:
~Silverlion May 24, 2005, 3:13:48 PM
Well done. Interesting. Kinda kinky-twisted in a way..but well written ;)
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*InspectorZenigata May 24, 2005, 4:07:12 PM
wow, the flowers in a row, not knowing who they are for, I thought "Its a graveyard..." Very well done. :D

--
Handcuffs, handcuffs and more handcuffs. I wonder why Pops doesnt get more chicks? :blushes: ~me
:fusionrock:
Im not as think as you drunk I am! ~~ Zenigata in "Dollar Wars"
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~Black-of-light May 24, 2005, 4:31:35 PM
ya, i was trying to hint i was in a graveyard but not actually saying it, that way the ending isnt spoiled. thx for the comment:highfive:

--
When I heard these words,
it brought me to shame,
"cant stop the bleeding,
I cant stop the pain"....

Take a look at my gallery!!
most of its Dark, but hey i like it
[link]
:iconblack-of-light:
~Black-of-light May 24, 2005, 4:37:57 PM
lol, thank you:)

--
When I heard these words,
it brought me to shame,
"cant stop the bleeding,
I cant stop the pain"....

Take a look at my gallery!!
most of its Dark, but hey i like it
[link]
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